Thursday, September 22, 2016

The Celestial Weapons

Hanuman_in_Terra_Cotta.jpg
Hanuman holds the mountain and a gada.
Terra cotta sculpture (n.d.). Source.


Once upon a time, the great warrior-prince Rama defeated an enormous horde of rakshasas, led by Subahu and Maricha. The battle was fierce, but with the help of celestial weapons called down by the sage Vishwamitra, Rama defeat the demons. However, despite this victory in battle, he had another problem, one that was more suitable to a king: the jealousies and intrigues of his subjects.
Once they had returned to their celestial sphere, the weapons rejoiced at the victory over the rakshasas. They hadn’t seen a battle a thousand years and they were glad to finally defeat evil and to serve a great warrior. That is, most of them rejoiced. Several of them felt as though they hadn’t received enough credit for their valor. The most vocal among these was the chakram. Rama had used him during most of the battle and this weapon was jealous when he saw the other weapons praising Rama. He took some of his closest friends to a private spot and told them his concerns. He told them of all the dangers he had faced, of how he had risked being captured or shattered by the rakshasa.
“Every time Rama threw me at the rakshasas,” he explained, “I was risking my own death and destruction.”
The other weapons were wary at first but, after a persuasive speech, they began to agree with the chakram’s point: that Rama hadn’t given them as much credit as they deserved for helping to defeat the rakshasas.
The chakram called together a meeting of all of the weapons. They were confused as to why the chakram would call a meeting. He was generally standoffish and rarely spoke to any who wasn’t his friend. Even then, he spoke without manners and was wont to use uncouth words.
The chakram rattled himself against his best friend, the gada and so called the meeting to order.
"I’m sure you’re wondering why I, the chakram, would bring together a meeting. I assure you that it is a most important topic. I'm not sure Rama is giving us the proper credit for our bravery. We were actually the ones who killed the rakshasas. Rama only aimed us. He only pointed us in the direction of the rakshasas."
To this, the bichuwa, who held the chakram in low esteem, replied, "But Rama is a brave and clever warrior. Surely we must give him most of the credit. We are, as we promised him, but tools to defeat evil. Are you not happy, O chakram, about our destroying evil, or would you rather have rakshasas overrunning every place on earth?”
This infuriated the chakram, who replied, "I never said that I wanted the rakshasas to overrun the world. You’re putting words in my mouth. Of course I'm happy that there are fewer rakshasas.”
"What we are discussing,” the chakram said, “is whether Rama deserves all this praise. Metaphorically speaking, I believe that he is simply the ship at sea, while we are the wind that pushes him. Without us, Rama wouldn’t go anywhere."
"Yes," shouted the pasha from the crowd, "but where would the wind be without the ship? It wouldn’t have anyone to help. All it would do is brush against trees and bushes. How useless the wind would be!"
The gada, who stood beside the chakram, said, "It would scatter the seeds of plants and help to grow forests!" The gada struggled to make itself heard above an audience which was growing increasingly restless.
After some time, the chakram managed to gain control of the meeting. "Let's get back on track. When has Rama ever thanked us for saving his life? When has he ever acknowledged how vital we are to his mission?"
The pasha said, "Why should he thank us? If anything, it is us who should be thanking him! Without Rama, we would never achieve glory in battle. Without Rama, we could never help create history!"
The gada whispered to the chakram, "He's right, chakram. Without Rama, we couldn't even consider ourselves true warriors. We would have just sat here as we’ve done for a thousand years.”
The chakram reluctantly agreed. He knew that, if it weren't for Rama, nothing would have happened.
The chakram turned to the crowd and said grudgingly, "What my friend the gada says is true: We need Rama in order to gain glory."
While the chakram and the gada discussed this, the weapons opposing them held their own conversation. They began to see the reason behind his argument.
Turning around from this group, the gada said, “And Rama needs us. Neither we nor Rama can work alone. We are both great, but a warrior without a weapon is like a man without a house: open and exposed to the elements. A weapon without a warrior is like a house without any inhabitants: useless.”
The weapons decided to send an envoy, the gada, to Earth. There, it spoke to Rama.
"Blessed Rama, we wish to thank you for helping us achieve glory in both worlds. You are a courageous fighter and we are proud of having helped you to slay so many rakshasas."
Rama, courteous and honest as ever, replied, "I could not have won without you, my strong celestial weapons. We have all played a vital role in defeating the horde of rakshasas. We each have our place, We do not have a choice in our position. Dharma is not to be changed by man or weapon. We must accept it as it is. Be happy that you, the weapons, and I have been granted such esteemed roles.”

The envoy returned to his fellow celestial weapons and told them what Rama had said. The weapons rejoiced in the knowledge that, not only had they played an essential role in the battle, but that Rama, prince and future king, had praised them so highly. They recognized the role of dharma in their lives and were glad to be placed so high. They eagerly awaited their next battle.




Author's Note


In this story, I sought to provide the perspective of some characters who didn’t consider Rama in a perfectly positive light. The likelihood that every good person would exalt Rama is unlikely. There are probably a few moral people (in other words, people who aren’t rakshasas) who have some reasonable issues with him. By using celestial weapons as those characters who weren’t entirely enthusiastic about Rama, I was able to show how beings of all ranks and positions could have conflicting opinions.
In addition, I wanted to present a story that wouldn’t receive any attention otherwise. While Rama is certainly the main character of the Ramayana, he isn’t the only one with a complex life. Those he happens to meet or work with for a short time have lives of their own (sometimes thousands of years long).
In the most recent revision, I elaborated somewhat on the exact issues that the chakram has with Rama. Chakram is doing more than whining. He actually went through dangerous circumstances in order to help defeat the rakshasas. I also added a part about how those who opposed chakram’s view talked among themselves and came to reconcile their own opinions with his. In this way, the weapons have a richer experience. Their change of opinion is more than spontaneous.



Bibliography


Various authors. Ramayana (public domain).


Wikipedia. “Bichuwa.”


Wikipedia. “Chakram.”


Wikipedia. “Gada.”

Wikipedia. “Pasha.”

5 comments:

  1. Hello! I believe I read your story in a previous week but this one is a little different with quit a bit more detail if I remember correctly. You might want to make sure you have created your portfolio correctly by going back to the assignment page and double-checking the procedure.

    Noted from my comment from the previous story, I really enjoyed how you personified the inanimate objects that were used in battle to help Rama win. I notice you also took a route in the end that makes Rama seem like a golden boy that can do no wrong which is great because it can really show the extreme differences between Rama and Ravana.
    In the end it seems their feelings were all misunderstood and the moral of the story could be how communication is key.
    Maybe in a future story you could tell a story about Ravana so the reader can really see the two extremes of the characters and compare them for themselves!

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  2. Hi Corbin! You've chosen a really interesting perspective from which to write your story, well done!
    Just a few notes I noticed:
    "However, despite this victory in battle, he had another problem, one that was more suitable to a king: the jealousies and intrigues of his subjects."
    -- This sentence is a little confusing, and doesn't help clearly state where the story is going. Are the weapons his subjects? I thought they are subjects of the celestial realm, and so not directly under Rama...? I understand that you're setting up trouble with jealousy and mischief, but could you clarify that it is between actors in the great battle and not exactly Rama's subjects.... or are they Rama's subjects in the celestial realm?

    "They hadn’t seen a battle a thousand years and they were glad to finally defeat evil and to serve a great warrior."
    --- I think you're missing the word "IN" in this sentence...... "hadn't seen a battle IN a thousand years...." :)

    "Rama had used him during most of the battle and this weapon was jealous when he saw the other weapons praising Rama."
    -- You're using this sentence to set up the rest of the story! Great, thank you! As the reader, we definitely are trying to figure out where we're going. This one sentence, however, could it be re-framed slightly? I get what you're trying to say, but I had to go back and re-read it a few times to understand exactly what was being conveyed. Could you perhaps say, "Rama had used him during most of the battle and this weapon was jealous when he saw the other weapons praising ONLY Rama, and not cheering on each other also."

    Can you also clarify this sentence about the wind? "It wouldn’t have anyone to help. All it would do is brush against trees and bushes. How useless the wind would be!"
    -- We go from envisioning the wind and the ship working together in the ocean, to "it" brushing aginst the trees and the bushes.... wait, we're on land now? Could you use a transition word or phrase, like "All it would do would brush against THINGS, like the trees and the bushes on land, or the waves in the ocean."

    I greatly appreciated your author's note. It helped me understand exactly what you were thinking when you wrote this story, and you're absolutely right: you created a very rich, complex, and diverse lifestory for other characters that otherwise would not have been highlighted! I very much appreciate the complexity that you worked with in their lives, instead of leaving it simplistic and straightforward.

    Wikipedia Links: Can you include a link to the Dharma wikipedia page somewhere? I am familiar with this term, but even I had to go look it up to make sure I was reading it correctly in this context. Thanks! ;)

    -Also, all of your links at the bottom of the page link ONLY to the Chakram's wikipedia site! I know they physically state the site they're supposed to go to, but when I clicked on them, they all led to Chakram's site, not the sites they were supposed to link to! I even opened up a different web browser to see if my computer was malfunctioning, but I don't think so.

    --Finally, the picture of Xena, Warrior Princess armed with a Chakram from the Chakram wikipedia page was exceedingly cool. It would take some extra time, but maybe alongside the wikipedia links, you could include photos of each of the weapons so the reader as a quick introduction of what they look like?

    GREAT perspective Corbin, and Great, Great Job! I would not have so many responses to it if it wasn't truly an interesting read!

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  3. I like how you personified Rama's weapons, and the dialogue was also quite funny! In fact, after reading the bit about how useful Rama actually was, it reminded me a bit of that scene from Monty Python's Life of Brian where the men are all gathered around the table and one person asks "What have the Romans ever done for us??"

    Anyway, I digress. The things I really liked about this piece were the small details you used to characterize the weapons. For example, calling the chakram standoffish and prone to speaking over others or how the bichuwa held the chakram in low esteem. I think that you may want to include things like that for a few more of the weapons, even though we see some of their character through their speech patterns.

    Or maybe you could also have some of them narrate their roles in some of the famous battle scenes? It's mentioned that they also "risk their own death" every time they're used but do they remember any particularly terrible experiences?

    All in all, this was a very enjoyable read and I can't wait to see what else you do with it and the rest of your portfolio!

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  4. This story is a great spin on characters. I love how the weapons themselves come to life and each category has their own personality. I found it interesting that the Chakrams were the ones to say something, when their trait was to be the group that was “Standoffish”. The Author’s Note also helped describe why certain angles of this original story became the key points. for example; “he isn’t the only one with a complex life”. I agree that the Ramayana is mostly about Rama and his complications, but to get others to see how he wasn’t the only one, was eye-opening.

    There was great separation between dialogue and plot by paragraphs. I felt as if I was reading straight out of the book with the style this story was written with. There was parallelism with the original story with shifts of main idea. (How Chakram got to speak about his perspective on how the other weapons and him were treated.) I believe that this made this story unique.

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  5. This is such a great story! I love the unconventional characters that you chose to highlight in this story. I think it is especially interesting to have characters who oppose Rama…especially since they are supposed to be on his side! This is something we don’t hear very often.
    However, I think that you can develop it even further! The conflict really hits its climax and then kind of fizzles out. It seems like the weapons are very angry and riled up, and then very quickly get over it and decide that they are wrong. It might be interesting if the weapons went to Rama still angry…and then Rama told them how much he appreciated them and that’s what makes them resolve their anger. Then the weapons who stood up for Rama could have kind of an “I told you so” moment, further developing their characters.
    But that is just a suggestion! Your story is one of my favorites. It is very well done. I enjoyed reading it!!

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